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3. Dragon-Elephant Body
Effect: Grants imnse physical strength, unshakable endurance, and rapid healing.
> "Activate!"
BOOM!
Power surged through his body like a raging river. His bones cracked and reforged, muscles tore and regrew his body undergoing a terrifying rebirth.
"AAAAARGH—!"
It felt like being torn apart, then reassembled from the inside.
Then silence.
He stood, panting, drenched in sweat but alive, and stronger than ever.
He clenched his fists. Veins pulsed with divine power.
"I could probably punch through a mountain now."
To test his new strength, he dropped to the ground and did a thousand pushups in one breath, barely breaking a sweat.
"Heh. At this rate, even Yanran won't be able to keep up with ." A smug grin spread across his face.
4. Qiankun Treasure Box
Effect: A pocket dinsion that stores living beings and absorbs natural energy.
A small purple box, etched with celestial runes, appeared in his palm.
"Ding! Blood-binding required."
Ye Chen bit his thumb, and a drop of blood dripped onto the box.
WHOOSH!
The box dissolved, rging into his hand as a glowing tattoo.
His vision blurred.
Inside the Qiankun Box
Ye Chen stood in a spacious courtyard-sized dinsion, shrouded in soft gray mist. It felt serene, charged with elental energy.
"So this is a personal world… it's absorbing spiritual energy by itself?"
Most spatial rings couldn't store life. But this place could hide people, store beasts, or beco a secret training ground.
"This will be invaluable.
5. Primary Puppet Pill
Effect: Forces any being below Dou Zong realm to obey, without mory loss.
Ye Chen held the pill between two fingers, eyebrows raised.
"A mind-control pill, huh? I could use this to turn a proud genius into my loyal dog or make a hidden expert betray their sect…"
He slipped it back into his storage with a smirk.
"This one's worth saving for the right mont."
Ye Chen exhaled, mind buzzing with possibility.
"I'm no longer just a disciple in the Yunlan Sect. I'm a monster in the making."
He felt the Dragon Elephant Body thrumming beneath his skin and the gentle hum of the Qiankun Box tattoo on his hand.
And this was only the beginning.
"The stronger I get, the more insane the system's gifts will be. Once my child is born…"
A dark, confident chuckle slipped from his lips.
"The entire Dou Qi Continent will tremble."
Ye Chen stood inside the small world of the Qiankun Treasure Box, the air cool and still, brushing against him like a whisper from another realm. The space stretched vast around him larger than any training field with drifting gray mist that gave it an ancient, untouched atmosphere.
"It's perfect," he murmured. "A hidden sanctuary… No one will ever find it."
His thoughts whirled.
This would be his base his secret refuge. In a world filled with unpredictable dangers, sches, and hidden enemies, this was more than just storage it was a future stronghold. A place to recover, to train… and maybe, to build sothing more.
A faint smile tugged at the corner of his lips.
Not just safety. Shelter.
Not just solitude. A ho.
One that he could share with soone who trusted him completely.
He imagined it lit by soft lanterns, a warm courtyard blooming with spirit flowers, and the gentle voices of the won he cherished.
"In a world like this," he thought, "where ambition and betrayal walk side by side… I want to protect what matters."
With a flick of thought, Ye Chen exited the small world.
In a blink, he reappeared in his room, right where he had vanished.
"So the exit point is fixed. No matter where I go in from… I'll always return to this spot."
He nodded to himself. That was useful knowledge it could save him in a desperate mont.
Then his thoughts returned to the rest of the rewards.
"System, extract the Puppet Pill."
A ripple tore across the air as a dark, marble-sized pill descended into his palm. It radiated a faint, oppressive aura one that sent a chill up his spine.
"This tiny thing… can control any being below Dou Zong?"
His eyes narrowed, heart beating faster. It was no ordinary pill.
Even in ancient records of top-tier alchemists, such an item shouldn't exist.
A drug that could enslave a Dou Huang-level expert without harming their mind?
That wasn't from this world.
"This didn't co from the Dou Qi Continent…" he realized. "This is sothing only the system could provide."
Carefully, Ye Chen placed the Puppet Pill inside a fine jade bottle and tucked it into the Qiankun world.
"This isn't for spirit beasts or bandits. One day, I'll use it… on soone truly important."
"System, extract the Nine-Star Dou Zong Experience Card."
A golden ripple filled the room. From within, a shimring card slowly descended radiant and noble, like a divine relic from the heavens.
Ye Chen reached out, holding the card gently between his fingers.
A low hum resonated through his bones.
"With this, I can beco a Nine-Star Dou Zong for fifteen minutes… That's more than enough to turn the tide of any battle."
In a world where power determined everything, this card wasn't just strength.
It was life insurance.
He stored it in the Qiankun world too. A trump card. Sothing to use only when the path ahead was pitch black.
With all the rewards now claid, Ye Chen sat down in quiet satisfaction.
Swallowing Yuan Jue : a heavenly technique that could devour Qi, pills, even enemy attacks, accelerating his growth far beyond normal cultivators.
Dragon-Elephant Body : a divine constitution that gave him strength, endurance, and stamina no ordinary man could match.
Qiankun Treasure Box : a private sanctuary. A second world.
Puppet Pill : absolute control, hidden in a bottle.
Experience Card : power enough to shake an empire, if only for a mont.
"All this… just for getting Nalan Yanran pregnant."
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